Academic writing particular requirements:
The following 9 exercises including the key points of academic writting
Exercise 1. Wealthy parents shouldn't spoil their children. Otherwise, their children will become too dependent on them.
分析:文体错误,雅思写作中不可以用缩写, shouldn't ---> should not, 相应的I'm --->I am , can't--->cannot(注意中间没有空格)
Exercise 2. Today, newspapers report lots of crimes in horrible detail.
分析:用了非正式口语词汇lots of, 写作里面如果修饰C. noun可以改成用numerous, a host of or a vast number of ; 修饰UC, noun 可以用 a great deal of.
Exercise3. The impact of tourism on these traditional neighborhoods must be analysed.
分析:英美拼写混淆。Cambridge ESOL 明确规定:英式和美式拼写都可以接受,但是不接受把拼写在同一篇文章里面混淆。英式-se结尾时美式用-ze,英式用-our结尾美式用-or, tre -- ter
备注:小作文里头的数字后的单位也不可以照抄缩写 50km 应该为50kilometres.
Exercise4. Serious crimes harm people's lives.
分析:用词没有特色,每个词都是初中词汇,完全可以用下列方式替换》
serious--->severe(or grave)
crime--->offense(or criminal act)
harm--->damage(or destroy/ undermine/ jeopardise)
people--->individuals
Exercise5. The advantage of space research is more than its disadvantage.
分析:be more than 没有特色,雅思作文里可以用outweigh这个vt表示大于或者超过的意思。
Exercise6. Today, our world is becoming more and more reliant on modern technology.
分析:more and more 松散, 可以用increasingly这个副词表示“越来越...",后面再加adj.
Exercise7. Advertisements are everywhere. There are many ways to do advertisements.
分析:句式过于短促,有rap效果,可以在两句话中间把句号去掉加上and,形成一个并列句。
Exercise8. The environment is becoming worse. We must work together to cope with this situation.
分析:句式过于简单,可以在两句话中间把句号去掉加上therefore,形成一个因果关系的复杂句。
Exercise9. So, we should make sure that globalisation does not endanger our own traditional culture!
分析:感情色彩过分强烈,像love letter的效果,“!”--->. , so --->therefore
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